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She had followed two boys towards the school, and accidentally ended up somewhere else. A castle? She didn’t understand the half of what was going on, but the volleyball coach who had been harassing Ann and Shiho, Kamoshida, was there. He was decked out in a pair of pink boxers, a royal looking robe and a crown, and ordering a bunch of shadow monsters to kill her. Ann had been so confused, but eventually her anger got the best of her and the spirit of rebellion within her released her persona, Carmen. That was how Ann had become a member of the Phantom Thieves, along with the two boys she had followed there. She was certain the blonde one was Ryuji. He talked like a fool and had the same build and mannerisms. Ann didn’t really consider him a friend, but they had gone to middle school together, so she was well aware of how be sounded and behaved. For some reason, they were using code names. Ryuji was known in this world as Skull, the weird cat-looking thing was Mona, and the leader was called Joker.
They all had on masks and costumes, so it was difficult to tell who Joker really was. He wasn’t someone too familiar. But he was beautiful and charismatic. The way he held himself confidently, how he athletically leaped from the chandeliers, and how gracefully he flipped his body into action when fighting the shadows. It was all perfection in Ann’s eyes. She wanted badly to know who he was.
When they took a break in a safe room, she playfully tried to raise his mask. She just wanted a peek at what else was behind there, other than those piercing grey eyes. But his hand shot out, preventing her from removing the mask, accompanied by a quiet but firm “no”.
As they continued to explore the castle, watching Joker slink through the shadows was enticing. Each time she got a glance at him in the light, Ann couldn’t keep her eyes off of the way he moved, perplexed at who he could be. Ryuji had no friends, at least not since the track team had been disbanded. Mona kept engaging her in conversation, giving her lessons about the world, but Ann couldn’t stay focused on the cat.
When the group was finally too tired to continue for the day, they exited the Metaverse. She was shocked to find herself back in normal clothing, standing beside Ryuji, an actual kitty cat, and that new transfer student that sat behind her in homeroom. “Wait, seriously?! Kurusu, right? The transfer student?”
“Akira,” he replied with a soft smile. “Do you like coffee?” he asked. ‘I live above a cafe.” He took her arm and they began walking.
“Ugh!” Ryuji called after them. “Coffee is so bitter! Guess I’ll catch you at school tomorrow!”
The cat ran at their heels, trying desperately to keep up. “Slow down, Akira! I live at the cafe, too, Lady Ann! I can’t wait to show you our room!”
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Author’s Note:
This story is based on Cupid and Psyche by Apuleius. In the original, Psyche is not allowed to see what her husband looks like. Her jealous sisters talk her into peeking at him while he sleeps. She is afraid he might be some sort of monster and plans to kill him, but she instead finds the handsome Cupid asleep in her bed. He wakes, and his mother Venus is angry when she finds out about his involvement with the beautiful mortal girl she hates. Venus makes Psyche complete impossible tasks and still won’t allow her to be with Cupid. In the end, Jupiter allows them to marry and forces Venus to accept it. For my retelling, I have again used characters from the game Persona 5. When Ann accidentally stumbles into the Metaverse, the others are wearing costumes and masks. She’s quick to figure out who Ryuji is, but Joker is more of a mystery until they return to the real world. I thought it would be fun to play with that, keeping her in the dark for awhile.
"Cupid and Psyche" from The Golden Ass by Apuleius. Web Source.
Hello Angela,
ReplyDeleteFirst of all, I’ve got to say I wasn’t expecting to find Persona 5 as the basis of a story, let alone an entire blog. This is quiet the interesting take on a storytelling setting, and as a fan of the Persona series, I’m quite interested in how this will progress. In addition, it’s nice seeing someone else focus their storytelling’s around a central setting since my stories are focused around the Fate/Stay Night franchise.
Anyways, I kind of wish you had incorporated Kamoshida more in the story. I think he would have made an interesting representation of Venus. He could have sent shadows to interfere with the group, similar to Psyche’ sisters in the original story. I also think it could have been interesting to explore more of the interactions of Joker and Ann. There’s a lot of Ann monologuing, which is fine, but I think more dialogue could have helped flush out the story more. Anyways, best of luck in your future storytellings.
Colton,
DeleteI think you're the first Persona fan I've met locally. I haven't played any of the Fate series, but I think it's really cool that you're using it for your stories. I agree that Kamoshida would have been an interesting Venus, I just couldn't figure out how to make it work (in less than 1000 words) while I was writing. Thanks for the feedback!
• Angela, I really enjoyed your take on Psyche and Cupid’s love story. I also did a different interpretation of their love story. The way you kept Joker identity a secret was great and kept me intrigued and curious to figure out who he was. I thought the friend, Shiho was going to end up being the mystery man, until the reveal of Kurusu. I am not really familiar with Persona 5. It would be helpful to have some more information in the authors notes about this side of the story telling. I was able to keep up with the story but curious what the different worlds mean and the different personas. Great story!
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DeleteThank you! I am trying to put more about the Persona side in my author's notes since you pointed this out. It can be really confusing to anyone not familiar with it. Thanks for your input!
WOW!! I am honestly impressed that you are able to keep such a consistent Perosna 5 theme! I am not familiar at all with the game, but I am with Cupid and Psyche and you did a wonderful job. I personally don't see a whole lot to improve on other than maybe a little more background information for someone who has never heard of the series or its content before.
ReplyDeleteGreat job, keep it up!
Connor,
DeleteI agree that I need to put more info into my author's notes. I'm working on learning to keep them concise, but putting enough info so that the story makes more sense. Thanks for your comments!
Hello Angela! This is pretty impressive and from reading a few of your stories I am really liking that you are using Persona 5 for your basis on how to write your stories. Anyone should be able to tell this is not your first rodeo when it comes to writing as I also noticed you said you write fanfiction for Persona. Very good job and I look forward to reading more in the future.
ReplyDeleteThanks! It's not my first rodeo, but I'm certainly learning a lot by writing this way, and from editing for my Storybook. I think this class is going to teach me some things I didn't even realize I needed to work on.
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